Kia ora Angel, I really enjoyed reading your letter.. The descriptions you have used make your writing interesting to read - I could picture what Te Ra was like from reading your description. Who is the letter from? Had you read a story that inspired this piece of writing? I look forward to reading more :)
Hey Angel, It looks like you put a lot of effort into completing this work and I am impressed with the character voice. I can really hear them talking in my imagination. Next time perhaps you might want to get a friend to check your spelling with you.
Ka mau te wehi, Angel. I can see you've worked really hard on this piece of writing. I could really tell how sad and lonely the character was from your description. It would be great if you proofread to make it easier for us to read. Looking forward to reading your next piece of writing.
Hi Angel, my name is Nevaeh, from Waikowhai Primary School. I really like how you put a lot of effort into your work and I could really feel how sad the character was in the piece of writing. Maybe next time you could edit your work to find any mistakes you did by like adding capital letters and watch your extra spacing. Anyways I really like what you wrote. Feel free to check my blog at http://wpsnevaeh.blogspot.co.nz/
Kia ora Angel, I really enjoyed reading your letter.. The descriptions you have used make your writing interesting to read - I could picture what Te Ra was like from reading your description. Who is the letter from? Had you read a story that inspired this piece of writing? I look forward to reading more :)
ReplyDeleteHey Angel,
ReplyDeleteIt looks like you put a lot of effort into completing this work and I am impressed with the character voice. I can really hear them talking in my imagination. Next time perhaps you might want to get a friend to check your spelling with you.
Ka mau te wehi, Angel. I can see you've worked really hard on this piece of writing. I could really tell how sad and lonely the character was from your description. It would be great if you proofread to make it easier for us to read. Looking forward to reading your next piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteHi Angel, my name is Nevaeh, from Waikowhai Primary School. I really like how you put a lot of effort into your work and I could really feel how sad the character was in the piece of writing. Maybe next time you could edit your work to find any mistakes you did by like adding capital letters and watch your extra spacing. Anyways I really like what you wrote.
ReplyDeleteFeel free to check my blog at http://wpsnevaeh.blogspot.co.nz/